Animal Whisperer

01/24/15
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I made a story and don’t know how to finish it. Please read the story first then comment on an idea for the story. (Also do NOT copy this story. Thank you!

 

Chapter One

Peter Discovers his Talent

 

Once upon a time there was a village in the country of England.   Peter Edwards lived on a farm with one sister and two parents.  Peter loved all animals including insects.  He loved to learn about them in the books he read.  He didn’t go to school so he spent a lot of his day reading.

 

One day he was out in the barn when he heard Rufus the dog say, “Come on, Peter. It’s been such a long time before you realized you had a wonderful talent.”  Peter jumped in surprise.  “Rufus?” he breathed.

 

“Yes Peter,”

 

“Can I talk to the others also?”

 

“You sure can!  They’ve been waiting too.”

 

Peter ran over to his pony’s stable.  “Thunder?”

 

“Peter!”  Thunder exclaimed, “You found your talent!  Sorry we haven’t talked to you sooner.”  “Oh that’s all right!” said Peter  “Can I ride you over to the ducks?”  “You mean Mr. and Mrs. Duck?” asked Thunder, “Sure!”

 

Thunder got tacked-up and rode over to the pond shouting as he ran,  “Peter found his talent guys!  Peter found his talent!”  Soon a whole parade of animals was heading down to the Lilly Pond.

 

That day, every animal rejoiced when he or her found out Peter Edwards had found his wonderful talent.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Chapter Two

Peter Meets the Animals

 

Peter had met a lot of animals that day, or at least heard their names.  Peter invited all of them up to his tree house for a little meeting ceremony.

 

“I want all of the animals lined up from smallest to tallest please!”  He said,  “First!”

 

“My name is Chipy the chipmunk.”

 

“Chipy, why are you called a chipmunk?”

 

“Because a man was a hero and helped a band of us escape when there was a chipmunk hunt. His name was Chip and he was a monk so we call ourselves after him. Chipmunk.”

 

“Wow! Next!”

 

“I am Fireball the Hawk.”

 

“Woah! A hawk! Next.”

 

“I am…….”

 

And many more.

 

“I want to form a club. We’ll call it Animal Whisperers. Does anybody want to join?” asked Peter. All of the animals raised their paws high in the air. “Good.” Said Peter, “This will be our meeting house. Let’s meet here everyday at 4:00 to 7:00. My bedtime is at 9:30 so I’ll be able to talk to you a lot.”

 

“Peter! Want to play?”

 

“That’s my friend Jake!” said Peter, “Got to go! Anyone want to come with me?”

 

“I do!” said Chipy, “I can ride in your shirt pocket.”

 

“Ok, bye!” Peter climbed down the tree eager to tell and show his friend his talent. “Jake!” he called.

 

“Hey buddy!” Jake said, “Woah! You have a what in your shirt pocket?” “Chipy. He’s a chipmunk and he has such a cute voice!” said Peter.

 

“Are you nuts! He can’t talk! Can he?”

 

“Yes, he can, see. Hi Chipster!”

 

“Peter,” said Chipy, “I don’t think he can understa…” “Peter,” said Jake, “He can’t talk. It really was a good joke though!”

Peter couldn’t believe it. Jake didn’t believe him! His best friend!

 

That night dinner was served early so he couldn’t play with Jake long.

 

“Mother,” said Grace, Peter’s older sister, “Please pass the bu……”

 

“Mother, I got to talk to the animals!” Peter jumped into the conversation.

 

“Oh really Peter. Really, I mean come on! Talk to the animals!” said Grace.

 

“Hold on there kiddo,” said Father, “WHAT is in your pocket?”

 

Peter held out Chipy and his mother screamed, “Get him out of the house! Out! Peter stop all of this!”

 

Peter led Chipy out of the house. But he didn’t go back in.

 

“Oh Chipster,” said Peter, “I can’t believe it! Is it only a fairy tale? Can you still talk to me? Please do, please do!” “I can still. Peter. I need to tell you something important. If you don’t believe anymore, you will lose your talent. Please don’t. I need you! To translate to people!” said Chipy. “Oh, I won’t, believe me!” said Peter.

 

 

 

The next day, when it was 4:00, Peter held an “animal meeting.” Fireball was so surprised but firm, Mr. and Mrs. Duck told him not to tell of his talent so as not to suffer, and Chipy and the mice and squirrels said it was so sad and they didn’t know what to do about it.

 

 

 

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4 Comments

  • Kyle Romick

    I think the story is interesting and I would like to see how it ends. A few things you could do is add a chapter or so of backstory so when the plot reaches the climax, it is even more exciting. I am also not sure how one would finish said story. I think that a good way to create a possible ending is that if secretly all the humans were really evil animals, they want to take over the world, and peter does’t know. Kind of like a conspiracy revolved around peter. The evil animals are drinking potions that disguise them as humans. The evil animals pretend to be his human friends and family. If peter doesn’t find a hidden recipe for an ancient cure, all his animals friends will become corrupted, and his special gift will be lost. Peter must go on a marvelous adventure full of spectacular magic and discover a secret world hidden right in front of his eyes, saving not only his friends, but the world…….

    And thats how I think you should end the story.
    p.s. If you end up getting famous off this book, can you put a special thanks to Kyle Romick in it. Thanks.

    01/24/15 – 7:30 pm

  • Julia

    Thanks Kyle for the comments. I’ll consider that.

    01/24/15 – 12:04 am

  • Granna & Grampa

    What about a story about Peter in which he continued to talk with the animals and didn’t tell anyone about it. Then suddenly there was a great problem at the local zoo in which the animals were becoming unruly and violent. The zoo offers a reward if anyone can help them. Peter comes to the rescue and becomes a big hero. The mayor and city council award him a medal a a big cash prize. His parents are so proud.

    01/24/15 – 1:02 am

  • Connie b.

    What an interesting story! I have always wished I could talk to animals.
    I talk to my cat but she has never talked back to me. Just an occasional meow .. sometimes she hisses too.
    You are a very good story-teller – I can’t wait to read more!

    01/24/15 – 3:42 am

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